2004-02-15 10:48 p.m.
spiritinblack Content (25/40)- The first entry I come upon is lyrics to a Postal Service song, and it was a good representation of what I was going to read later. Most of your entries are lyrics or poems, or other random things. You don't write much for yourself and when you do it isn't very interesting. You use a lot of the same phrases over and over again [Mother of God, you guessed it, etc..] and it becomes rather annoying after reading several entries. I also gathered from some of your entries that you're pretty religious and it's nice that you express that through your diary. If you're going to post lyrics instead of your actual words, you might want to mention why that lyric mean something to you. It was hard to keep up with what was going on with you because it skipped from lyrics, to post, to dreams. I don't really like the style of writing you use for your diary, but it's your diary, so do with it what you want. You seem like a really nice girl, and this is your place to express what you feel, so do that with your words and not other people's. Layout (5/10)- Lucky Designs must be popular. Hm, a depressing type of layout. The colors a very plain. The images work, so no complaints about that. I don't like the way the navigation looks, maybe it should be seperated differently or something. The staircase shape of the links looks weird. I wouldn't use this layout, myself. I just noticed the Saliva lyrics under the images. Eh, I'm not feeling a connection with the layout and your writing. I actually don't feel a connection with the layout and the lyrics either. This just isn't my style, sorry. Grammar and Spelling (9/15)- Your own writing needs quite a bit of improvement, doll. Updating (5/5)- Blah, blah, blah, refuse to grade. Free points. Contacts (9/10)- Comments. AIM. Guestbook. Tagboard. MSN. Email. Getting Around (8/10)- All right. Extra Things (5/5)- Reads. FAQ's. Bands. Links. Gifts. Cast. Reviews. Banner. Plenty more! Fun Factor (1/5)- The lyrics were sort of fun to read. Extra Credit (2/5)- For the massive amount of extras. Total (69/100)- Comments- Fix some of the things on the layout, or get a new one. Try writing more for yourself and about what you think/feel. Don't just write about dreams, what goes on at school, and copy lyrics. Write about you. Reviewed by- Mandy |
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