2005-03-08 11:50 p.m.
shoppergirl06 Username/Diary Title [2/5] - shoppergal06 - I don't really dig the name that much. If it has anything to do with the extent of your personality, I'm pretty sure I won't dig the diary very much either. I think you could have searched your soul a little deeper for something more original & ballsy. x[xxx]x - The 'xxx's' are changed to whatever the title of your entries are & although that is a nifty trick, I don't like it. It is everchanging & keeps things interesting, but what if the title of your entry is something that clashes with your diary? Uh oh. It's annoying, methinks. First Impression [5/10] - I like the crisp, neat feel to it, but it also seems like it's missing something. You have way too much going on where the links should be, BUT I don't see very many links. If you want your diary to look neater, I suggest adding the excess things to another page & link it. I also don't like for entries to be centered, because it sometimes distracts the eye & makes it difficult for people to read. Content [20/40] - Well, I read a good chunk of the beginning of your diary hoping for a bit of substance, yet found next to none - this was probably the closest i came to relating you an actual teenager - parent problems. You seem to have a very busy life from what I gather, but it's mostly with afterschool activities. You also seemed to very involved in religious activities & god. The one thing that bugged the HELL out of me in a lot of your entries were the 'shoutouts.' That is so not necessary. Stop it. This entry seemed a little pointless & elementary, but so did the majority of what you wrote. Your diary seems to be a lot more aimed towards your friends than random people fishing for good diaries. I, personally, can't say that I was too intrigued with your life, but that is probably because you seem to be the complete opposite of me. In some cases that would amuse me, because I would want to know more, but that's not the case here. It was nice to see you make tiny realizations like this, but alas, that does not lead to interesting reading, for most. This entry made me want to cry, yet slap you for wallowing in self-pity. Looking at more recent entries, I see you haven't updated too much in 2005, so I'll work with what I have. Entries like this one annoy me, because it's all over the place. I really couldn't get into your diary. It just wasn't the kind of things that interested me, plus you mention a lot of people, places, & things that I have no clue about & it's a lot easier to exit a page than try to use my imagination. Keep writing & let your friends enjoy it, because that seems to be the purpose & if that should be the case, your diary is as good as any other. Layout [23/30]- The layout come from Fallen Star Designs, a site I admire a lot for their creative & original designs. I, however, don't really like this one. I like the white background & image well enough, but it seems to lack color & organization. Sometimes, it's the designers fault, & sometimes, it's the peson who is using the design - in this case, I can't really say. The template does seem to fit with your diary, although you don't really babble on about love & the like, it seems based for a younger female, possibly looking for love? Also, the previous & next links desperately need to be put in working condition & the archives page could certainly use some cleaning out & organizing. Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [3/5] - Your spelling seems grand, you could dare to expand your vocabulary, & maybe get rid of all the exclamation & ellipsis'. That's very fucking annoying. Contact [2/5] - Email. Notes. Extra Things [2/5] - Me. Loves. Hates. Feeling. I suggest adding a few more. Nothing special, just a few simple quizzes or a cast page. Your song - Well, obviously the lyrics on the image make me want to choose the Keith Urban song. Sadly, I cannot be that simple & even sadder, I know that song! I give you: New Found Glory - I Don't Wanna Know. You remind me of a stressed out, fun-loving teenager, as does the song. Wee! Three Words - Stressed. Hyper. Normal. I would explain myself, but I don't feel like I should have to. I think your diary title should be - 'don't go worrying about me, it's not like i think about this constatantly', because you, my love, always seem to be worrying about something or stressing. You should chill out. Everything will be fine & even if it's not, at least you won't keel over from a heart attack. Your lyrical word of advice - My eyes burn from these tears. extra comments: You're a very brilliant & mature girl with a bright future ahead of you. You seem to be doing a fantastic job at avoiding the pressures of being a teenager - drugs, smoking, drinking, sex, etc ... & that's a very respectable quality in anyone. Keep it up & remember to keep your head up, no matter what.
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