2005-03-11 5:05 p.m.
pippinsgirl

Username/Diary Title [3/5] - Pippinsgirl reminds me of the surfing brand "Piping Hot" which is really lame. But otherwise, I have no idea what your username refers to. You should put a 'What the Username Means' page up. The title on the other hand is pretty okay as it suits the image on your layout (guitar) but you could've gone with something a bit more creative.

First Impression [2/10] - Very boring and lack of visual quality. All I see is a guitar and a poorly made layout.

Content [30/40] - As per usual, I’m going to start with the very first entry and as per usual I find the writer gobbling up the entry with internet slang and something typical that goes like this – “well hi ppl, wazzup and stuff, anyone reading this? no? okly, cool. ”. But I’ll forgive you as this was 3 years ago. I’m skipping on to this and it doesn’t come as a surprise that you have dropped the colloquial writing. Now I can really get into your diary.
I liked this entry, but then I start seeing uncanny resemblances in this. I’m skim reading through your entries now and they all seem to show the same tone. You talk about this person or it could be different people but you never really give me their names. I don’t know what you’re really talking about either. I do like the fact that your entries have a lot of depth and it shows you’re a really thoughtful and sweet person. But your diary is not really my kind of thing.

Layout [5/30]- To be honest, your layout just annoys me. The plain image of a guitar does you no good, and neither does the black background, boring white links and too-small-for-my-eyes grey font. But you’re getting some marks just because I think it’s wicked that you made the layout yourself – and not everyone can do that.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [5/5] - You have a very expanded vocabulary and you have the ability to link your sentences quiet fluently. Ignoring your earlier entries, everything is GOOD.

Contact [5/5] - Mail guestbook and notes. It’s all there.

Extra Things [5/5] - You should link each group of extras into a different page instead of putting them all in one page. E.g. your reviews section could be another link just for the reviews. Apart from that you’ve got a bunch of extras and I loved your My Book one. Love.

Your song - Only Hope by Mandy Moore.

Three Words - God. Love. Hate

I think your diary title should be- Have a little faith in me?

Your lyrical word of advice -

I wanna wake up with the rain
Falling on a tin roof
While I’m safe there in your arms
So all I ask is for you
To come away with me in the night
Come away with me
Norah Jones- Come Away with Me

Extra comments: Overall I’d say your diary is very profound and you would’ve received a higher mark if it wasn’t for your unsightly layout.

Score -[55/100] + 5 marks
Total Score - [60/100]

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