2004-07-25 2:46 p.m.
pathological-liar.dx Username/Diary Title [2/5]- Your diary title is so original --- the title of each entry. (Note: Sarcasm dripping). You probably should come up with something that represents you, and the fact that the title is always in a mixture of lowercase and uppercase makes it look like leet writing, and it annoys. I like your username though. I clicked on it when I first saw it some time ago. And I always appreciate a short write-up on why you choose that particular username, but you don't have it. Boo. First Impression [5/10]- The diary title got to me, because it's only a word and what's more, it's mixed with small and big letters. The layout is too plain, and I find the font too small. The stats counter at the bottom of the entry looks annoying, because it's big and glaring compared to your writing, which certainly isn't a good thing in a diary. Nothing should be more prominent than the writing itself. Content [24/40] - I prefer deeper entries like this to ones like this where you talk about everyday things, because these are vague and they don't paint a good picture in my head. Rather, those deeper entries allowed me to go deeper(sorry for the lack of adjectives) into your mind and learn how you feel. Other than those deep entries mentioned above, I could feel no passion from your writing, and I think the reason could be because you do day-logging most of the time, and they weren't able to capture my attention. Your writing is generally fine, as in, it's mostly grammatical correct, but no feelings are evolved from it. You write for yourself most of the time, which is of course a good thing, but the disadvantage is that your reader probably wouldn't get too much into it. For example, they probably aren't going to care how much your bill is in this entry and some other entry where you also calculated some amount of money. These kind of entries probably only serve to entertain yourself should you decide to read back what you wrote in the future. I read the whole of your diary, and it left nothing to be desired. I do see that you have potential, though. So just get that passion out of you and write with it. Layout [15/30]- The layout's so plain there's nothing much to comment on. It looks dead, there's nothing special about it and in this case simplicity doesn't work. A nice image should probably be added to it to liven it up, or simply get a new one. The stats counter should probably be stashed away in some small corner instead of sitting at the end of every entry glaring at the reader. Are you that eager to show off how many visitors have been to your diary already? I think not. Other than all those, I suppose the layout is neat enough to sustain my attention span, if your writing doesn't put me off first. Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [3/5]- A few spelling errors here and there, and I think it would look nicer if you used apostrophes. Contact [5/5]- 4 ways. Great. Extras [3/5]- Bio, pictures, reviews. There could be a lot more. Level of: This is where we determine the levels of certain things in your diary. [on a scale of 1-10] Three Words: Ordinary, Better, Secure Your Song: "Castles in the Cloud" Total Score - [57/100] Reviewed by Celine previous | next |
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