2004-02-16 8:33 p.m.
no-morewords Content (5/40)- From what I gathered you tend to be very day-loggish. I know grades and school and such are important to you, but I personally don't care to read about them. The lonley poem you wrote was pretty nice. A good relief from the rest of your diary. You usually just update with reviews, or what I would consider extras. A diary should be a place for you to write about yourself and your life, thoughts, dreams, whatever. But if it's just a diary full of reviews and extras I can assure you it won't get many good reviews. This was one of the only seemingly real entries that I could read without skipping. You need more like that and less day-to-day accounts of school. Layout (3/10)- Oh my god! I canno't focus on anything. You have a billion links floating around your entry. Well, I suppose it's self-deigned, since I see no visible link anywhere. I hate anime and anime type related things, but good expression of your interest. I wouldn't necessarily mind this layout so much if it weren't for the masive amount of links clogging it up. This is ridiculous. I would tell you how to fix it, but as of right now, I don't really see a way. Possibly gettinf rid of the other language for the word might help. It's original, and I like it, but it makes the link way longer than it needs to be. I guess add a few extras pages to get some of the links off of the main page, that's all I can suggest. Grammar and Spelling (12/15)- Fair. Updating (5/5)- Free points! Contacts (1/10)- Notes. Comments. Getting Around (5/10)- It's just too confusing. Extra Things (5/5)- Let's just say, way too many. Fun Factor (0/5)- Sorry, hun, but no. Extra Credit (0/5)- No, again. Total (36/100)- Comments- Clean up the layout, write more for yourself, and ask for a re-review in a couple of months. Reviewed by- Mandy |
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