2004-06-06 10:54 p.m.
kimdan
First Impression [7/10] - The overall feeling your layout gives me is clean, neat and organized. Although it's the first time I've seen this layout, I'd seen this image a lot of times before. It's been overused. (I shall not say too much about the layout here in case I run out of things to say in the layout section.) But it's alright, I guess, as I can see everything clearly and nothing is messed up. Content [28/40] - Your diary is a light-hearted one. They are mostly day-logging, and although I found them to be quite alright at the beginning, I soon became bored with them because all you do is recount what had happened on that day, and what I really wanted to read about was your feelings, your emotions, yourself. I liked the last paragraph of this entry though. It's the way you put it into words that makes it so comical. And I also thought your written world domination plan was quite amusing. Oh...My heart went out to you in this entry. How I wish I could reach out and give you a hug at that time. Sigh. Are you feeling better now? Now, that's the type of entry I wanted to read more of, but it's not that I'm sadistic and want to read about you feeling miserable, it's that I want to read more about your feelings. Your writing sometimes reminds me of a 13 year old instead of a 15 year old. It's those "action" words you put in between asterisks, like these --- "*gasps for air*" and "*hugs phone*", and those words in capital letters. I know you're trying to emphasize the importance of them, like in this entry, but I think it's kind of immature. No offence meant. Although your entries are pure day-logging, they are very detailed, and I can't ever imagine how you manage to type them all into the computer, because those words, those thoughts, are really quite like something right out of your brain itself. However, I think it would be better if readers could know more about what you're feeling inside, and less of other people, less of merely recounting of what happened on that day. Oh, and I think you tend to use too many of the "fuck" word in your writing. "Fucking cute", "fucknose"(??), and even "for fucks sake". Sigh. Layout [24/30] - As I've said, I've seen this image a lot of times before. However, the usual ones are huge, but this one, on the other hand, is a smaller version and well-captured. The brushes add an interesting touch to it too. I think it suits teenagers from around 13 to 15 years old, which means that I think it suits you, because I find that teenagers are always writing that their wings are broken and they need to learn how to fly and go into depression mode and blah blah blah. I like how your links are classified into "About", "Stalk", "Credits" etc. I think that it's very organized. But I think you should write more, because whenever the navigational bar is longer than the entry box, I find that the entire layout is sort of off-balanced. Everything is in black and white, and I think that's good because you can find no colours mismatched. Your guestbook layout doesn't match your main layout. Most of the time it does not really matter, but this time it really doesn't match. A kitten + A broken-winged girl = No link. It probably does not matter to you. I'm just voicing out my opinion. Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [3/5] - A couple of internet speak here and there. 'dunno', 'coz'... And some spelling mistakes that I am sure which are real errors and not typos. Contact [5/5] - 4 ways. Perfect. Extras [5/5] - 99 things, photos, questions, fun stuff... Level of: This is where we determine the levels of certain things in your diary. [on a scale of 1-10] Three Words - Day-loggish, Detailed, Ordinary Your Song - "Superman's Dead" by Our Lady Peace Total Score - [74/100] Reviewed by Celine previous | next |
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