2005-04-12 11:22 a.m.
Jules9-
Username/Diary Title [3/5] - Jules9- - The hyphen is completely pointless, and your username sounds as if it would send me to sleep. Jules’s Diary - I’m not going to include all that template information in this critique, as I find them completely pointless. Your title could be a lot better; more adventure is needed here!
First Impression [10/10] - I used to have this template too.
Content [30/40] - You can tell from your first entries that you have other diaries, because from the off you link cast pages and other pages. I actually enjoyed most of your diary despite preconceptions from the beginning. Even though you have a detailed cast, there were still points where I was bored with long daylog. You also manage to write in length and detail, which sustains the entry. Some writers could say all you have to say in a paragraph.
Layout [20/30]- I am a Barbie fan, so I am obviously going to like the image. Apart from the irrelevance of the barcodes, everything else is really good. It matches, and is generally pretty. The links in capital letters aren’t my cup of tea though.
Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [4/5] - It seems fine to me, except for when you use excessive dots.
Contact [4/5] - Move them onto their own page to minimise space taken up in your layout.
Extra Things [5/5] - Quite a lot, and they are very detailed pages, specifically the cast page.
Your song - Anything about friends, because they are very much a part of your life.
Three Words - Detailed, kind, long.
I think your diary title should be - As long as you get rid of the template info, anything will do.
Your lyrical word of advice
Sometimes people come into your life
Like they're meant to be
And suddenly you've found someone
Who sees the world like you see
Friends Forever- No Secrets.
Extra comments: 5 points from request section.
Total Score -[81/100]
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