2005-02-27 6:06 p.m.
jenkins16 Username/Diary Title [1/5] - Obviously, numbers have contributed to your loss of marks here. I’m trying to find out how the word Jenkins16 is associated to you and I absolutely have no clue. Maybe you should put up a page where you could explain your username. But anyway, jenkins16? That’s horrible. First Impression [5/10] – Hate the font and the shade of purple. Too much contrast. Though this - “I'm bisexual, and I'm a REAL bitch!” – got me interested. Content [15/40] – I read the rules first and that shocked me. There's just too much of the "I don't care" attitude when indeed, you do care enough to even bother to write out a set of rules, that people probably won't even be bothered going through. Okay, starting with your first entry here. ‘Until’ is spelt incorrectly on that entry and you have quite a few typos. I’m a sucker for grammar and spelling mistakes. You should really spell check your entries – it works for me and it would also make all your entries so much better and make more sense.This was not necessary. You never ever need to blog about changing layouts etc. It’s just not necessary. Again I see a lot of internet slang. LOL’s and w/e’s. It’s like you just discovered how to use them. Oh god, another pointless entry here. I’m getting so sick of reading these, so I’m going to skip into the next year, hoping to find you have grown out of all the internet slang. And god bless, WOOHOO! Imagine the surprise when I read this, and found just ONE lousy spelling error, A really interesting entry, and I’m starting to realize that you could really be something. Layout [20/30] - The white on purple is hurting my eyes. The font is WAY too small and incomprehensible. Your links are all over the navigation bar and you should sort them out onto their separate pages – e.g. your listings. I do like the image, and how the quote “I waited too long” just fits perfectly. But honestly, you should just get a total new layout. Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [1/5] – A lot of spelling mistakes and errors. Overuse of EXCLAMATION marks (!!!!!) and question marks (??????) You also use internet slang e.g. b/c, u, b4, y, nite. Extra Things [2/5] – WOW Great a diary rings whore. You have three bloody pages filled up with diary rings which you belong to, yet they don’t really tell me anything about you. You have a review page…kind of like a listing. Are these review sites which have actually reviewed you? Or are they just there to fill up another page? The profile page is NOT included as an extra, and neither is the fans page. I don’t really care about your quiz page either. I was pretty interested with the fact that you had a poetry link, but that’s not finished. And your ‘sex diary’ is not working. I would suggest you to put an actual biography page on, that actually tells me something about yourself, who you are, what you like etc. The profile does you no good as all I get is that ‘if I don’t like what I see, then it’s just too fucking bad for me’. Maybe you could also try a cast page and all the other extras that you can find on most diaries. Your song – “Welcome to my life” - Simple Plan, based on your latest entries. Three Words – Bisexual. Solana. Lover. I think your diary title should be – I’ve been waiting for too long. Your lyrical word of advice -
extra comments: I like the fact that you’re a bisexual and you’re not afraid of saying it. Gotta love that.
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