2004-02-11 4:30 p.m.
hottieof06 Content (25/40)- I have mixed emotions over your writing. In one way I like it because it's very different and I almost feel as though you're talking to me, but I don't like the lack of spelling, grammar, vocabulary, etc... Most of your entries are about "your boyfriend" Willus and your friends. I kind of get a few giggles out of the way you word things sometimes. No offense, but you use A LOT of slang and it just represents a normal teenager's diary. I wasn't realy interested in your diary, but someone who knows you or relates to you might like it. It's just not my style. Layout (7/10)- Design credits go to App-designs. I've seen this layout before. I don't much like it. It doesn't suit your writing too well either, in my opinion. It looks very innocent and childish. What's with all the invisible scrollbars? Fix that. I suggest something a little more grown up for you and your writing. Grammar and Spelling (10/15)- Pretty decent, minus the slang and blantant use of the word "niggas". Updating (5/5)- Spiffy. Contacts (9/10)- Notes. Guestbook.Tagboard. Email. Getting Around (8/10)- It'll do. Extra Things (5/5)- Cast. Guestbook. Surveys. Pictures. 75 Facts. Reviews. Rings. Counter. Fun Factor (3/5)- Hmmm, a few of the extras kept me around for a bit. Extra Credit (0/5)- Zilch. Total (72/100)-Bronze Award Comments- The music's got to go, doll. Seriously, I didn't know how to cut it off from your page, so I put my volume on mute until I finished the review. I couldn't concentrate on your writing with the music blaring. I think the layout needs to be changed to something that expresses you a little better. Cut back on the slang. Reviewed by- Mandy |
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