2004-06-04 10:28 p.m.
girl-razor Username/Diary Title [1/5] - Your username reminds me a girl cutting. That's why I clicked it on. Not because I'm sadistic or what, but these kind of "dark" usernames tend to attract me. Your title is terrible. I don't know what those square brackets are doing there. And I can't figure out what those little symbols in between your title are. Your title doesn't fit your username NOR your layout. Bad. First Impression [7/10] - The colour of your text box doesn't really match the background and the picture. Your title certainly doesn't match the layout and username too. Nothing ever seems to match anything. But the colours of the background and image seem pleasing to the eye. I read your first entry and decided that this diary is going to be worth reading. Content [20/40] - I was wrong. I thought every of your entry, or at least most of them, would be of the same depth as your current one, but no. You are vague on most occasions. You don't elaborate on what has happened. Like here, you didn't tell your readers what that "one nice sparkle" was, and then you just went into your "philosophical" mode. It's like what you had said, this is a diary for your random thoughts, but this is simply too random. All your random thoughts in one single entry is too much. At the beginning of the entry you talk about how bored you are of all the petty bullshit, then towards the end you talk about your Wonderland. I can't seem to link those two together. It's like you can't decide what to write for that entry. This is another example. At the beginning you talk about love, then at the bottom you suddenly jumped to saying that you have exams. What, exactly, is the link? For this entry, what didn't he do? Please don't leave us hanging in mid-air. You tend to repeat yourself, how people are false, and plastic. Like here and here. I can't get a feel of you through this diary; your writing doesn't let me feel anything. Perhaps it's because your feelings fluctuate too much, and the way you describe them, emotions? Maybe. But passion? No. I like this entry though. It's one of a kind where you actually bothered to elaborate and I could understand. Other than that, you talk too much of your love, and at times you give me the impression that you try hard to sound philosophical. In conclusion, I don't think I enjoyed reviewing your diary. Layout [15/30] - I don't know what the image is about, because the text box is blocking almost the entire image. It's like you have no idea where to place the text box and then you just put it there for your own pleasure. You could use opacity for the text box so that readers can actually see the image properly. Or redo the whole layout. You can probably do a better one than this. You should credit the image source too, and perhaps do a write-up on this self-designed template so that people know why you chose this image and what it is all about, because I personally think that this image isn't very well-chosen(maybe it's because I can't even see half of it whole) and an explanation would probably clear things up to a certain extent. You should also put the things on the right (the loves and hates) on an "extras" page to organize things better. Your guestbook page is equally as bad as your main page, if not worse. You make the same mistake of putting the two text boxes anywhere you like it, and the colours do not even match the black background a single bit. A pre-made signmyguestbook template would probably look better, or get a pretty one from here. The above are just things that I would do if I were you, and no offence was meant. P.S. One or two of your previous designs are better than this. For example, "Marilyn Monroe" and "Fuck The Flag". Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [2/5] - Not exactly perfect. A few internet speak, spelling errors and typos here and there. Contact [3/5] - Guestbook and notes. A link to your email would be better. Extra Things [2/5] - Rings, cliques, and a pathetic list of loves and hates at the side. You should compile them into one complete list and put them on an "extras" page. Level of: This is where we determine the levels of certain things in your diary. [on a scale of 1-10]
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