2005-02-22 9:19 a.m.
Flossytin.dx Username/Diary Title [4/5] - Flossytin - hmm, when I hear flossytin, I literally think of a tin covered in floss. I like that you have explained it, although it actually just sounds like you have made something up just to answer that question. However, it is interesting, and very original. Flossytin /:/ Dizzy Like the People- It matches your design! First Impression [10/10] - Simple, yet effective layout. Content [35/40] - I find your writing quite interesting. I see also that you have been on hiatus for quite a while and you have a full entry just to re-cap. I think that you could have said a little more than “I pierced my ear“. Summing up almost 4 months should take up much more time and space! However, sidestepping this, your pre-hiatus entries are very interesting, I feel like I am kept on my toes at all times. Most of it is daylog, but you do have patches of what I can see as from the heart. A good balance if I could ever see one. The only criticisms: Lay off the irrelevant stuff. Like about your friend eating hot sauce. That little comment almost lost my interest in the entry. The other thing is to perhaps link your cast in entries where you are using a lot of names. I tended to get lost very easily, and then vacant. Layout [20/30]- There are only a few things I would change here, as generally everything is in order. Firstly, I do not care for the names of your links at all. I think it would look a lot better if you didn‘t abbreviate. Secondly, the font you are using seems to be quite small on my monitor. See what you can do about that. Overall I like the white background, and the image is OK, although not what I would go for. Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [3/5] - Problems arise in the abbreviations of the links, and the word ‘commented’ as ‘c2mmented’. Contact [5/5] - Guestbook, AIM and E-mail. Fine. Extra Things [4/5] -You have a lot of well organised extras, however, due to the size of your font, they took mush more disorganised than they actually are. Think about stepping it up a size. Content wise you have some really good extras. I am pleased. Your song - Nobody’s home by Avril Lavigne. I don’t know why, maybe it’s that vacant feeling. Three Words - Descriptive, opinionated, creative. I think your diary title should be - Well, considering what I am currently seeing, what you have works. Your lyrical word of advice - This is based on your ‘about’ page.
Extra comments: The only things that put me off your diary at all were the link names, and the frequent use of names. I know you have a cast page, but what sort of hassle is it to have to keep going there when I see a new name? Total Score -[81/100] previous | next |
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