2004-02-11 4:52 p.m.
ffx-2 Content (38/40)- The "I am" section says you're 13, but your writing seems to be way more mature than that. You talk a lot about the future and love and things that 13 year old kids definitely should not be worried about. I do however like the way you phrase certain things and talk about more mature subjects. If you didn't I probably wouldn't have stuck around as long as I did to read your content. You use punctuation in some artsy form of expression in quite a bit of your entries and nothing bothers me more than that. You also randomly capitalize and bold words, which is kind of interesting, but I don't understand why you do it. Other than that, I would say that your diary is a pretty good read. For such a young age, you seem to have a nice grasp of life and it's disappointments. I think you should start an emo/screamo band and get those ugly emotions out. [Joking] Layout (6/10)- Sel-designed, eh? Well, it has a nice message, but the image is really weird and there's an arrow on it. I think I would prefer to simply be confused about the image than have an arrow pointing to the "switchblade". What's that over there to the far right side? Some sort of title that rally doesn't serve a purpose at all. If you necessarily want it there maybe you should put it at the bottom. You entries would look nicer with a narrow border around them, instead of floating underneath the image. Get read of the "I am" section and move the "navigation" section down a bit more to even things out. Grammar and Spelling (13/15)- You use ellipsis way too much and you make a few errors here and there, but nothing all too noticeable. Updating (5/5)- Awesome. Contacts (10/10)- Aim. Email. 2nd Email. Neomail. Notes. MSN. MSN email. Cripes! Getting Around (10/10)- No complaints. Extra Things (5/5)- Reviews. 7 Surveys. Random Things. Cast. Surveys. Final Fantasy Quotes. Blog. Likes/Dislikes. Cliques. The days " to ". Diaryrings. Two lyrics. Fun Factor (5/5)- You have tons of extras. Your diary was a little depressing, but the extras and free TBS lyrics all but made up for it. Thanks! Extra Credit (5/5)- For spiffy taste in music and billions of extras. Total (97/100)- Gold Award. Comments- I'm really amazed that you write so well for your age. Fix a few things on the layout, get rid of the unnecessary punctuation, and we're cool. Reviewed by- Mandy |
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