2004-06-06 1:29 a.m.
dullstar
First Impression [9/10] - I wouldn't say I'm too impressed by the layout. The colour of the background, in fact, is hideous, in my opinion. The image isn't too attractive to me either. However, I like how the entire layout is neat and organized. There's no overflooding of links, just a simple row of necessary links. You should probably consider adding the "current" link to that row of links, to enable easier navigation, you know, in case a reader has gone too far back and wants to come back to the present. Your current entry caught my eye too. I can see that you have a good command of the English language and the entry is interesting too. You put what I always think when I'm out on the streets into a perfect flow of words. I'm impressed by your writing, at first glance. Content [38/40] - I started reading from your very first entry, and then worked my way upwards, selecting a few entries from each month. By comparing your first few entries with the current one, I am surprised at how much your writing, or rather you, have matured over the years. I am also surprised at the duration you have stuck with your username and with Diaryland, because people, in general, often have a few diaries as they quickly got sick of their initial username, and for other reasons as well, but you stuck with yours for four years! After reading a few of your older entries, I can't wait to proceed to the more recent ones, after I saw how your current entry went, because I felt that that was substance. In this entry, I can't exactly pin-point why, but I felt as if I could relate to you. You said a lot of "i dunnos", and I know that feeling because sometimes you just don't know what is happening or why it is happening. It would look neater if you used capital letters and proper English in that entry though. Your older entries (back in 2001) consist of mostly rants and pointless day-logging like this, this and this. Ah, I can never defend myself as well as you could in this entry. What a sound argument. Hm, I'm not sure if "argument" would be the right word to use, but well, with my limited vocabulary I guess you'll just have to make do with that. Oh, and how I agree with you :) And nothing like admiring your own writing to make yourself feel better in here. You have the habit of posting conversations on the diary, and it is really annoying as they are long, and half the time I, as a reader, don't have the interest to continue reading until the end. I think it's just me. I dislike the idea of posting conversations on diaries. You are one amusing person. Or at least, you give me the impression through your choice of words. For example in this entry, "Yay! I can get rid of the 300+ songs stored on my puny computer.", "I deserve this, right? I deserve to take advantage of him? Yes, I do." Oh, and in response to the last question in this entry, everyone gets annoyed by the commercials that seem to be everywhere, at every channel, including yours truly, of course. Ooh, the last paragraph of this entry goes for me too, although I'll never admit it on my own. I must mention this: I was planning to simply select a few entries from each month and do the reading, but during the 2001 August entries, I was so absorbed that I kept clicking on forward that I forgot what I had planned. That goes to show how intriguing your writing is. I liked this entry. I never thought suicide should be justified, because as my friend said, if you have the courage to kill yourself, then why don't you have the courage to live on? But after reading what you have had to say I think I am quite convinced that your friend's suicide was, well, inevitable. Anyhow, I too think that suicide should legalised because it IS none of the government's business whether a person lives or dies. This entry touched me. It IS difficult to come to terms with the death of a friend, and when I know I'll never get to see my friend again, I sort of realized the cold harsh fact, and yes, like you, I was slapped in the face. I prefer those two entries to any other, because they were emotional, very different from your normal everyday entries, and I almost cried. What you said was so true in those two entries. I'm adding them to my favourite entries. On another tone of note, I admire you. How you declare, seemingly without a doubt, that you are a fabulous person, and how everyone should love you too. Girl, I love you. And I know you love yourself too. And I love that fact. However, because some of your entries were particularly long and was purely day-logging according my opinion, I merely scanned through them as they failed to capture my attention. Although I can't explain how, I know you've changed a lot over these years in Diaryland. All I can say is that, you've matured. Apart from the content, it can also be seen from the way you've discarded internet speak like "dunno" and "2gether" and made the writing neater by using appropriate capitalization. I seldom see diarists as dedicated to their diary as you are, and I know you'll certainly enjoy reading all these entries all over again one day when you're old. I enjoyed reviewing your diary, even though there are so many entries. You certainly talk and write a lot, but with detail and depth. You are one good writer. Keep it up. And you're going to my favourites. Layout [24/30] - The background colour is a hideous blue and purple in-between, but somehow it seems to blend in quite alright with the image and the entire layout. The image, though, I'm quite baffled by it. No doubt you have explained the origin (and yes, I am definitely no pop culture junkie), but I am still, well, all I can say is that different people have different taste, because I don't really like the look of the picture. But I am amused by the words in the thought bubble,"I don't care! I'd rather sink than call Brad for help!" I wonder if that has a special meaning to it...? Or am I just reading too much into it? Hm. Nevertheless, I really like how this layout is so clean, neat and organized. The clear font gives readers a fresh feeling. It makes reading a diary really easy, especially when you are a diarist with good English. It would be better if you add the "current" link though. :) Credit goes to Vivalicious. Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [4/5]- You used to use some internet slang in the past, but things have since gotten a lot better. And it annoys me how you never capitalize your first alphabets. Contact [5/5] - 4 ways, very neatly placed on the "contact" page. Extra Things [5/5] - Cast, layout, pictures and more pictures, 75 things etc.
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