2005-01-06 7:14 a.m.
drknssbfalls Username/Diary Title [3/5] - drknssbfalls: Eh, It's not very entertaining. It mildly reminds me of the movie, Darkness Falls, which I'm assuming is where the name originated from, if I'm wrong, do correct me. It's not really my style, but I guess it could catch a film fanatic or fan's eye. just a girl - I'm guessing it's a reference to the No Doubt song. Kind of boring, yet quaint & simple. I can dig it. First Impression [3/10] - Well, your last update was some time in November & your image doesn't work. The template looks a little botched to me, but maybe it's just my computer. With the lack of updates & Angelfire logo in the corner, I would say that you don't care of old drknssbfalls very much anymore. Content [20/40] - Personally, your diary is the kind I wouldn't be that interested in. It's mostly a day-to-day, ho-hum dramarama about your life, which isn't all that dramatic - no offense. You talk about school & hanging out with friends & I understand that's a part of every teenager's life, but it's just not enough to draw people in & let them get to know you. You rarely ever open up & show emotion, & if you do it's short & doesn't really go into much detail. You're life is an okay read, but I would rather read about the emotional bouts of you as a person, rather than how great (or not) your classes werre today. Your diary seems more like a friends only read to me, but if you want outsiders to get interested, talk more about things that they could connect with you about. Layout [10/30]- The layout comes from Rose Designs. I'm sure it would be a nice template if it was in working condition, but like I said the image is on the fritz. Aside from that, I don't really like the long list of large links beneath "Guide". If you're going to have that many links, you should use a smaller font, so it doesn't look so crowded. Your "Currently" has an html error in it's midst, as well. I suggest a layout that's easier to maintain than the one you have & I also suggest something a bit smaller, since most of your entries are only a few sentences long, or maybe a paragraph. I don't like the clumped & cluttered look, myself, but if you do - so be it. Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [5/5] - 'Currently' on the main menu is misspelled. That was the only extremely noticeable grammatical error that I detected. Good job! Vocab's a little underdeveloped, but you get your point across. Contact [5/5] - Notes. Email. Guestbook. - That's good enough for me Extra Things [3/5] - Readers. Currently. Last Five. You could definitely use a few extras. Try a cast page of short bio. Maybe a few surveys - just a little something to amuse your frequent readers & also visitors. Your song - Something Corporate - If U C Jordan - because of that line "Highschool's over... blah blah blah." You mainly talk about school & daily events, so you get a silly song. Three Words - Busy. Easily Amused. Confusing. I think your diary title should be - sleeping away my life;; the sheets outline me so perfectly -- because you mention sleep in almost every entry. But I can't much blame you, I enjoy my sleepy time too. Your lyrical word of advice -
extra comments: The layout definitely needs some work, but I would suggest a completely new design. I figure since you don't update that often anymore, you're probably not too interested in your diary anymore, so I probably wasted all my time on this, but I had fun. You seem like a very sweet & fun girl & it was a pleasure reviewing your diary, dear. & I reward you 10 EXTRA POINTS!!! for taking so long to review you. I apologize.
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