2005-03-31 8:15 p.m.
Dreamwalking

Username/Diary Title [3/5] - Dreamwalking - Another username which I think totally works for a diary. It makes me think literally of walking in a dream, or in a daze. dreams....- OK, ‘dreams’ should have a capital letter. Works with your username but could be a bit more adventurous.

First Impression [0/10] - Blurry.


Content [5/40] - Not at all my cup of tea. I find Christian diaries very annoying. This is because they tend to very hypocritical. In your bio you say you want to ‘Glorify’ God, and yet you fill your entries with ‘depressive’ comments. This to me is very hypocritical and annoying. Your statements are never backed up. I can’t understand what is wrong with your life because you aren’t telling me. There is such a huge contrast between your first entries and the ones I am reading now. You have gone from long, quirky entries, to short, cryptic, morbid entries. You are trying unsuccessfully to write in poem, which just makes you look uncreative, like you are hiding behind verse, and hiding that you have nothing to actually write about.
Honestly, I can’t find anything that would justify this apparent hatred for life. Maybe this time last year I would have felt sorry for you and understood, but since my Dad died and left me at 18 and my 2 siblings at 15 and 12, I have a very strong opinion on life, and not taking it for granted. No matter where you are and how you are feeling, there is ALWAYS someone worse off than you.

Layout [20/30]- the images are unclear and so ruin the whole look. I like that you stick to the same colour scheme, but I think that the contact is much too bulky and you should stick to having it on it’s own page. You also link to firefirefly, which has been defunct for ages now.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [5/5] - It seems fine to me, except for when you use excessive dots.

Contact [2/5] - Move them onto their own page to minimise space taken up in your layout.


Extra Things [1/5] - Maybe think about these, and for God’s sake finish your cast page.

Your song - “Outa Love” By Anastasia.


Three Words - Holy, hypocrite, poetry.


I think your diary title should be - Perhaps “Dreams can come true”

Your lyrical word of advice


When you dwell in the exile on a stranger,
Remember you are precious in my eyes.
Do Not Be Afraid- A hymn, sung at my Father‘s funeral, and frequently when I was at school.

Extra comments: 5 points from request section.

Total Score -[41/100]

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