2005-03-12 2:33 p.m.
Daze-of-rain
Username/Diary Title [3/5] - Daze-of-rain - Pretty. I think of 2 things. A rainy day, which I am a true fan of. I also think of being in a daze in the rain, kind of like when you get caught in a light shower and it is kind of dazing. Is there life out there- You are missing a question mark at the end of that. Kind of ruined from that.
First Impression [10/10] - This is murder to view in 800x600 if you include photos.
Content [38/40] - You are very family orientated, and rightly so. I like reading about your life and day to day accounts. You do also have a lot of thoughtful entries and it is obvious that you put a lot of thought into what you are writing. Also some of your entries just feel like a rush of thoughts from one to the next, many with no link with them. I don’t mind these entries, but there can be such a ting as too much.
Overall I think you should be happy with your writing. Sure, you aren’t amazingly heart stopping, but there aren’t many who are. Otherwise we would all be published.
Layout [10/30]- It has the effect of an old photograph with its use of browns. However, I feel that it is very much out of proportion. The size of the navigation compared to the image is stark; the navigation seems cramped onto the side, almost out of sight. The poem, while nice, takes up a lot of room as well, and does take focus away from the actual entries. I also think that you could benefit from removing the previous entries, as you are using a template that doesn’t look good on long entries. Having the previous entries just makes it longer.
Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [5/5] - It seems fine to me.
Contact [5/5] - Email, Comments, Notes, Guestbook. Fine. I also like that they are all under one heading.
Extra Things [5/5] - You have the usual, but I like that they are all under their own headings.
Your song - Sweet Child O’ Mine by Gun’s ‘n’ Roses.
Three Words - Mother, thoughtful, tumbledown. (That refers to the thoughts, and also kind of the rain)
I think your diary title should be - A play on word about rain.
Your lyrical word of advice
Alone I can hear
Hear our song
Playing for me again
Won’t blame it on myself
Just blame it on the weatherman
BWitched- Blame It On The Weatherman.
Extra comments: I did like your diary, and would probably check back. 5 points from request section.
Total Score -[81/100]
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