We give them away.

2004-04-20 5:27 p.m.
blindessence

Username/Diary Title [4/5] - Blindessence has a nice ring to it. It's very crisp and elegant sounding. Very mature. It sounds beauty oriented and deep. I like it, but I probabaly wouldn't cick on it, because I don't go much for the looks thing. See right through me - fits the username perfectly. I llike that it's not something random and completely different. Pretty nice.

First Impression [8/10] - I guess I was right about the beauty thing. The layout looks simple and organized at a first glance.

Content [20/40] - I wasn't too enthralled with your writing. I actually didn't enjoy it that much. It was more or less the idea of your personality I got through your writing that made me dislike it than the writing itself. You came off as a very self-centered, spoiled, and ahem, provocative young lady. You're older than me, which struck me oddly, because after reading 20 or so entries and assuming you were at the most - 15 or 16 - I felt mislead. Your writing isn't up to par for your age, but it is a good representation of yourself and your life. I guess I just imagined someone of your age talking about college and relationships. You speak a lot about sex and jesus, even I do that at times, but I swear it's mentioned in almost every entry. It almost comes off as disgusting and crude. Despite the fact, that I was annoyed by some of the things you spoke about, you do have an interesting life and can sometimes even be emotional. You have a bit of humor and sincerity in a few of your entries that make up for the lack of maturity in the rest. If I were to suggest anything it would be to speak less about your sex life. Obviously you're pretty damn active, but the only people who really want to read about that are horny teenage boys, single, middle-aged men, or your best friend. Since I'm none of the above, I prefer to be left out of the "I fucked x today" circle. Sorry to be so blunt. Al I'm saying is, what if one of the twelve year old diarylander's stumbled acorss your diary? Your diary is basically a bunch of daylogs with a little hint of emotion crammed in here and there. I skimmed a few of the boring daylogs, because they weren't interesting [duh], but I enjoyed some of the more personal stuff. I also apologize for your low score. It isn't because you have a bad diary. Your content is fairly good and you're a very interesting person. I just simply didn't find your writing to fit your age and I also would wish I could have got a better connection with you, but you didn't really reveal much about yourself.

Layout [10/30]- Design. I don't dig this layout. I'm sorry. I'm not into the beaty and beholding thing. I think it's a very superficial layout. I do understand what it's saying - everyone is beautiful if they think they are. I'm all for that, but I personally don't believe in looks being an important part of a person. I realize looks are an important part to soceity in this generation, but I don't agree with it. That being said, I'll start with the review. I think the background would have looked better if it was a dark brown color. The black is somewhat boring and also takes away from the emphasis on the image and your writing. The font above the image looks pixelated and the color doesn't match the rest of the colors used. The last five entries would look better if there wasn't a space between each one. I like the color used for the links and I like the way they're arranged with this layout. I think a different font should be used, I'm just not sure which one. The entry area would look better if it had the foggy transparency behind it. The little pink kitten counter at the bottom definitely has to go. It's the brightest thing on your entire layout and honestly, I keep wanting to stare at the kitten more than your writing or the layout. Put it on an extras page. This layout seems to be very "you", so I won't complain anymore.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [3/5] - It's good. I saw that you used ellipsis a little too much and a few mispellings, but nothing that couldn't be improved.

Contact [5/5] - Email. Notes.

Extra Things [5/5] - Playlist. Reads. Counter. Last 5 Entries. I-mood. This is Me. The People. Rings. Loves/Hates. Soundtrack. Reviews. I suggest making an "extras" page to get rid of the semi-long list of links. It's kind of annoying.

Level of:
Angst: You're angsty, but in a different way than anyone I've ever read before. You hide it well too, so you're a 4.
Depression: You only get depressed when there is a good reason. You're depression level reminded me of my own. You're basically happy, but sometimes shit gets you down. 3.
Happiness: I perceived you as a fairly happy person. You had your bad days, but who doesn't, eh? 2.
Sociability: Very, very social. You speak of a lot of people in your entries, so i can tell you're not a lonely person. It just seems that you wish you were closer to some of those people and tend to distance yourself from them. 2.
Boredom: I wasn't bored, persay, just somewhat not amused. You're life is interesting and I don't mind reading about it, because you make it sound like a good soap opera. I just didn't know what to make of a lot of it, maybe because I would have handled it differently. Who knows? 3.
Selfishness: Well, you are a wee bit selfish. You seem very focused on yourself and your happiness and don't really care too much for everyone else's. You may be totally different in reality, but from your writing, I feel I can say you are. 8.
Coolness: You actually strike me as a pretty cool person. I would probably hang out with you or we would at least see each other around in the same crowds. Also, you're very open and blunt about things, so that's a plus. 9.
Musicality: Bush. Silverchair. Hole. Milencolin. No Doubt. Nirvana. Stone Temple Pilots. After checking out your "soundtrack" , I can say you have a fairly good taste in music. I could tell you went through the teeny-bopper phase of the Backstreet Boys, Nsync, and Hanson, but you pulled through with more than one No Doubt album. A very wide variety too. I like that. 10.

Three Words - Sexual. Blunt. Judgemental.

Your song - Britney Spears - Not a Girl, Not Yet a Woman

Total Score -[55/100]

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