2005-04-01 5:28 p.m.
Amber-yoder

Username/Diary Title [3/5] - Amber-yoder - To me, this means nothing. Your name is Amber, which is clear. One’s true self poured out for all to see - It is a little too morbid for my taste, but I think that may be your style.

First Impression [0/10] - I feel like giving you a massive injection of colour, because you are lacking any.


Content [5/40] - Your obvious immaturity is plainly seen in your writing. I have read about 20 entries at this point, and I still cannot find one trace of what is actually the matter with you. You write in poetry, which disguises the fact that you can‘t write. You are making nothing seem like something by using fancy words and grammar tricks. I‘m laughing because you talk about love, yet how old are you? 15? Stop trying to grow up and concentrate on the fact that you are a child. Am I missing something?
I feel like I am being too over-zealous, like there is a bigger picture that I cannot see, please show it to the readers? Your writing style is too cryptic and personal, so when I read something, all I can see is words, and nothing else. If I knew you maybe I could understand what you were talking about.

Layout [10/30]- The image is horrible. Photos of graveyard’s and cemeteries should be respected in their own standing, and not used for decorative purposes. Aside from that, and the fact that you don’t capitalise links, everything else seems ok. Think about introducing another colour, because looking at something so bleak can get tedious after a while.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [4/5] - It seems fine to me, except for when you don’t capitalise links.

Contact [1/5] Don’t have a contact me link and a notes link. Contact link should list them all. A redirect to another diary is a bad idea. Contain everything on the same site.


Extra Things [2/5] - Some quiz’s.

Your song - “Something morbid and depressing.


Three Words - Dark, articulate, thoughtful.


I think your diary title should be - Involve a light.

Your lyrical word of advice


You came into my life sent from above
Better than a dream, such a perfect love
And I'll adore you 'til the end of time
Angel of mine
Angel Of Mine- Eternal.

Extra comments: 5 points from request section.

Total Score -[30/100]

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