2005-09-09 9:37 p.m.
Exhausted-faith.dx


Username/Diary Title [3/5] - Exhausted-faith.dx - I have the image of a very tired nun. Perhaps she has just ran a long distance? I know it is supposed to be serious and thought provoking, but it conjures all sorts of images. There will be no white flag above my door - Titles need capital letters. A dido song, English, like me.

First Impression [0/10] - It looks amateur from my first look.

Content [20/40] - I don‘t know. I get a vibe that you are a good writer, yet when I picked some random entries (because I’m not about to attempt to read everything - we all have lives) I didn‘t really enjoy what I was reading. Its almost like you wrote your entry and then thought “Now what would make this entry more interesting“ and added a load of stuff as an afterthought. I don‘t know, it just doesn‘t seem real, like you are only writing for the reader instead of yourself. You should do both.

Layout [5/30] - It isn’t good. Full stop. The stark white scroll link things do not go with the dark theme of the template. You have random words all over the place, and your font is not eloquent enough. Speaking of eloquent, that link is broken. Either fix it or remove it. Also, you might like having different templates for different pages, but I find it very annoying, and pointless in even asking for a review that includes the layout.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary [5/5] - Seems to be fine.

Contact [5/5] -E-mail, Guestbook, Notes. I think that is ample.

Extra Things [4/5] - Lots, I just don‘t like the template change.

Your song - Overprotected - Britney Spears

Three Words - Colourful, dark, animated.

I think your diary title should be - Punctuated better.

Your lyrical word of advice -


And when the night falls
The loneliness comes
I Wanna Dance With Somebody - Whitney Houston

Extra Comments - I’m sorry if you think I am being too hard on you. I usually naturally take off points for diary-x sites but I didn’t this time. 5 points from request [which for other reviewees reference, will be stopping now.]

Total Score: [47/100]

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